Snow-ku 2

entombed deep below,
blades of grass lay pressed to earth--
close, wet cold and waiting wanting.

The first pass through drafting the final line of the haiku read "close, wet and waiting." Upon further review I thought that maybe by changing the two descriptors from "wet" and "waiting" to "cold" and "wanting" I could achieve two things: further embedding the moment in a wintry season and allowing for another level of metaphor in connecting the blades with myself or people.

Thoughts?

Stay Poetic!